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Dick-Laurence Renku -FINISHED- by ~SOLARTS:iconSOLARTS:



waning heat–
a few bare spots
in the melon patch

(L)


harvest moon–
sweat drips from his
balding head

(D)


termite tracks–
talk of Jackson's death
in whispers

(L)


dusk hollows storm winds resound

(D)


wet newspaper
Iran bleeds
into commerce

(L)


her father's voice
between each gunshot
silence

(D)


hibiscus flowers
in full bloom
morning skyline

(L)


tui song
steam from the tea
on my face

(D)


noon breeze–
the toddler mimics
an airplane

(L)


clear night
the streetlamps come on
one by one

(D)


city dusk–
the strip club's roof
in neon

(L)


red light district
a policeman
undercover

(D)


evening rain...
the working girl
haggles her price

(L)


homeless
smelling of cheap wine
he turns 50

(D)


acid jazz
a string of butterflies
in the crocus

(L)


Charlie Parker
on the stereo
a moth wriggles

(D)


Parker's Mood...
on the flowering cactus
a grasshopper

(L)


rubbish day...
throughout the valley
a child's song

(D)


coming dusk...
the rising pitch
of night hawks

(L)


bright moon...
the security guard checks
every room

(D)


hazy moon...
the evicted couple
sorting clothes

(L)


making love
in my childhood room
memories

(D)


faded photo
my grandmother's face
is a blur

(L)


family reunion–
so many things left
unsaid

(D)


summer cleaning
Mom discovers
my old life

(L)


sea breeze
the frisbee just beyond
my reach

(D)


empty beach
the puppy chases
a ghost crab

(L)


grandma's kisses
feigning disgust
year after year...

(D)


morning drizzle
a pretty name
on the headstone

(L)


still dividing the family grandma's will

(D)


ocean sounds
our old dog runs
in his sleep

(L)


"hush now child..."
the grass
murmurs

(D)


returning home
a raindrop warps
on the windshield

(L)


day moon-
a tui bathes in the
rain gutter

(D)


thunderclouds...
the flower vendor
breaks for lunch

(L)


throwing out
yesterday's violets
dusk falls

(D)


empty campus
a janitor reads
on the stairway

(L)


working late
I learn the
cleaners' names

(D)


tonight every frog is a soloist

(L)


mountain stream
trading songs with the
bluesman

(D)


evening renga
for awhile the crickets
as one

(L)


composing a reply
to his last poem
seagull's scream

(D)


rain my father returns with a squish

(L)


moths
alight on the window
summer moon

(D)


hint of autumn
Father and son
measure roof tiles

(L)


summer heat I practice my apology

(D)


my own problems...
the beggar lowers
his cup

(L)


dusk clouds reflecting blossoms

(D)


Labor Day
the migrant workers
in their usual spot

(L)


summer's end
two men argue
in Arabic

(D)









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©2009-2010 ~SOLARTS
:iconsolarts:

Author's Comments

Okay - so this is a part of the Haiku Chain Gang Challenge. However, this series of poems will be a chain all to itself composed entirely by Laurence55 and Solarts. We will be writing the renga in the comments section and then I will update this deviation regularly to include the new entries.

The starting verse was a poem that Laurence wrote in response to Mahi-Fish's poem here: [link] The second poem in this is by me, Solarts, the third will be by Laurence, the fourth by me, and so on. Who knows how long it will go.

If you are interested in joining the Haiku Chain Gang Challenge have a look here: [link] and then choose a poem and start replying!!! Have fun.

This is a "closed chain" in the renga, as Laurence and I want to do a little sparring. But feel free to go to Laurence's original post of "waning heat" and respond to that as part of the Chain Gang: [link]

But the poems contained herein, other than the starting verse, are closed to responses for now, just to give Laurence and I a chance to get into it.

:heart:

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:iconaqua-rat:
I enjoyed reading this set very much. I am glad I waited to see it in its entirety. You both make me feel that I have shared, at least to an extent, in your summer experiences. It is nice to see the differences but also to see where they touch and run together.

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Go to the-haiku-club for great contests!
:iconsolarts:
Thanks so much - I really enjoyed writing it too. Oddly enough - it wasn't summer for me, and I don't think it was summer for Laurence either. That is one aspect of renga that I like - the imaginative aspect.

Thanks again.

All the best,
Dick

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"We are intent on reducing art to its simplest expression, which is love." (Andre Breton)
:iconaqua-rat:
That's fascinating to learn - it all seemed so real and immediate.

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Go to the-haiku-club for great contests!
:iconlaurence55:
It was summer for me actually :)
:iconthetaoofchaos:
magnificent, far reaching, introspective, self-aware, self-doubtful, resigned, joyous; the list of adjectives goes on for me.

i shall want to read it again.

--
The world is an eraser for these words


- Jack Kerouac


joy is a height best measured from the depths
:iconsolarts:
Oh, you are too kind!!! I am so glad you enjoyed this experiment. I think Laurence and myself will be doing another one really soon.

:)

--
"We are intent on reducing art to its simplest expression, which is love." (Andre Breton)
:iconesin:
Nice to see how this turned out.

:thumbsup:
:iconsolarts:
Thanks - we have enjoyed it a lot.

:)

--
"We are intent on reducing art to its simplest expression, which is love." (Andre Breton)
:iconnunheh:
"No Fats or Uglies here!"
Strip Club Notice on the way
To the Marine Corps.

You two are kind of inspiring. I want to play...but I'm too chicken!

--
Everytime you gain your heart's desire you pay for it with a piece of your soul- Heraclitus
:iconsolarts:
Hahahahahaha - made me laugh.

Thanks man!! Well, hopefully we will be starting a new set soon.

:)

--
"We are intent on reducing art to its simplest expression, which is love." (Andre Breton)

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